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When you look into my eyes
What do you see?

When you speak my name
When you pull me close
Are you really that broken?
So you no longer feel the love I give
The affection I show
Or the hope my eyes try to be

Come over here now
Stop hiding
Tell me your truth
Show me those tears
And I'll tell you my truth
Show you my fears
I'll tell you about a girl
A girl who found hope in the most hopeless boy
Let me wipe the dripping sorrow of your cheeks
as I figure out what you need right now
Let me be the first person ever to be there for you
I'll tell you this story,
I'm sure you will appreciate it
the girl is cute and boy so strong
A happy ending too, just as it should be
Just as it will be
So come over here now
Crawl up into my arms
Let me listen to your heartbeat
so I can hear you be alive and healthy with me
and I'll let you listen to my calming voice
so you can relax and learn how to rely on someone

Then tell me, when you look into my eyes
what do you see?
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This I'm not as happy with. I don't like the title, I don't like the structure and I'm not happy with the ending, or the beginning actually...but hey! You guys may think different, please tell me if so! Also critique about what I did wrong is highly appreciated!

This is an old poem as well, but I re-edited it like totally, so it's almost new x)

anywhore, now I wanna know what you think about it, go viewer go! :giggle:
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It's beautiful! You might change relay to rely but other than that it's amazing:D
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~Aifos96 Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
*change it* Thank you very much! :glomp:
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